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The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
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Submitted By kirbyfreak on 10/04/10
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Finished the second part of The Explorer Wars (finally)!  Thanks go to Picard for reviewing it/checking for plagiarism and Afish for editing/adding some stuff to it!  Here's the link to the first part: The First Mission.
 
The Explorer War - Captured!

            A disturbance slowly drifted through the fog clouding Kirby_freak's mind.  It unsettled Kirb's state of unconscious mind, dragging him out of his sleep.  The disturbance grew louder, until Kirb could make out the voice of a girl.  "Kirb...?  Can you hear me, Kirb?"  Kirb slowly opened his eyes.

            “Huh…?” he muttered in the momentary confusion of awakening.

            He saw Lizzle crouched down next to him.  She waved her hand in front of his face.  “You okay?”

            “Yeah…  I think so.”  Kirby sat up and looked around.  A giant blue, translucent box surrounded him and Lizzle.  Looking through it, he could see the blurry forms of men hurrying around the green interior of the ship.  He soon realized that a cutlass and a gun hung on the belt of every man who passed by.  Kirby sat up straighter as he realized where they were: the enemy Sky Monster.

            Kirby looked at Lizzle.  “What floor of the Monster are we on?” he asked.

            “The third.  It looks like this is their control room.”  She paused.  “You sure you’re okay?  It took me two days to recover.”

            Kirby nodded.  “Yeah, I- Wait, two days?” he exclaimed.  Lizzle frowned and looked away.  “How long have we been here?”

Lizzle glanced at Kirby’s distraught face, sadness permeating her gaze.  “We’ve been here for five days.  I woke up three days ago.”

            “But… they wouldn’t leave us!  Would they?”  A slither of doubt crept through Kirby’s mind.

            “No!  I don’t know about Fish, but Thedude and Aubrey would never leave someone behind.”

            “But.…”  Kirby’s words trailed off as he came to a realization.  Lizzle looked sadly at him again.  “They were captured too, weren’t they?”  Lizzle just gazed at a passing space pirate.  Kirby slowly stood up, testing his weight carefully before straightening.  “Is there any way to contact Flyclub?”

            Lizzle shook her head slowly.  “No.  I already tried that.  They blocked our signal.  You can try again if you want to, though,” she said, gesturing behind Kirby.  He turned around.  Behind him sat his and Lizzle’s buggies, lined up against the wall.

            He took a step towards his buggy, but stopped.  “They won’t kill me if I get in it, will they?”

            Lizzle gave him a brief smile.  “Nope.  They seem pretty confident that we’re trapped.”  She sighed.  “Which, we are…”

            Kirby opened the cockpit and climbed into his buggy.  Everything seemed okay.  “Hello?  Anyone out there?”  Silence greeted him.  He slid out of the vehicle and closed the transparent dome.  “Nothing…”

            Lizzle frowned.  “I wish there was something we could do…”

            Kirby nodded.  “We could always train, I guess,” Kirby suggested.  “Maybe we’ll think of something while we duel.”

            Lizzle stared at him for a second, then shrugged.  “Better than just sitting around,” she said, pulling out her cutlass.  Kirby drew his own sword and lunged at her.  She stepped to the side and swung her blade downwards.  Kirby parried the blow and twisted, slashing at her stomach, but Lizzle blocked it and stabbed, her blonde hair flying.  Kirby stepped back, simultaneously forcing her sword downwards.  Jumping backwards out of her reach, he pushed off the box’s side and leaped at Lizzle.  She dodged, and a whole new series of blocks and parries began.

            Five minutes into the duel, Lizzle stabbed at Kirby again.  He started to pull off the move he had done previously, but then suddenly rolled the right and started an onslaught of blows.  Lizzle stumbled backwards as she tried to block all of the swipes.  Suddenly, he feinted to the right.  Expecting him to slash at her side, Lizzle brought her sword up to defend herself.  Instead, Kirby pulled back, pushed his sword under hers, and gave a quick twist of his wrist.  Lizzle’s cutlass was ripped out of her grip and clattered to the floor.

            Kirby_freak sheathed his sword and bent over.  “Good job,” he said as he tried to fill his lungs with oxygen.  Lizzle just stood there in shock.

            “That was amazing,” she breathed.

            Kirby straightened up, blushing slightly.  “Not really.  Kruncher is way better,” he refuted.

            “Yeah, but for a trainee, that was pretty good.”

            Kirby shrugged.  “Thanks.  You’re good too.”  He grinned.  “Pretty much the only thing I’m good at around here.”

            Lizzle looked at him quizzically.  “What do you mean by that?”

            Kirby sighed.  “I’m horrible at shooting lasers, I’m not a very good driver, and I’m hopeless with machines…  I don’t really see why Aubrey picked me for this mission.”

            “Ask him.  After we escape, that is.”  As soon as the words left her mouth, the cube prison they were trapped in fizzled and faded away.  Kirby jumped in surprise as a series of clicking noises reverberated around the room.  Every pirate on the floor had a pistol trained on Lizzle and Kirby.

            “Well, this sucks…” Kirby muttered under his breath.  One of the pirates stepped forward.  He was tall, with long brown hair, a small beard, and cold, blue eyes.  He spoke in a sophisticated British accent.

            “Please, step this way,” he requested.  They reluctantly obliged, and he laid one hand on each of their shoulders and steered them down a ramp.  If not for the cold, firm grip he had on their shoulders and the dozens of guns pointed at them, they might have looked like they were being given a tour of the Sky Monster by their uncle.

They began walking toward the exit.  “Now,” the pirate said, “to make sure you don’t try anything…”  Two pirates roughly grabbed Kirby and Lizzle and slapped two sets of handcuffs on them.

            The two captives stepped out of the Sky Monster and onto solid ground.  Kirby stared in surprise.  He hadn’t even felt the Sky Monster land.  They were in a large meadow.  Grasses and wildflowers surrounded them; bright blues and purples assailed their eyes with sharp stabs of color.  Scattered around the meadow were large, brown, dead spots where not vegetation grew, left by the coming and going of Sky Monsters.  Around the perimeter of the clearing grew tall, leafy trees, spreading as far as they could see.

            As they looked around, another Sky Monster dropped noiselessly in next to the one they had arrived in, displaced air blowing everyone’s hair back.  The engines hissed as they cooled down.  A few minutes later, three, handcuffed boys were pushed out, followed by five more pirates.

            Lizzle gave a small squeal of delight as she recognized the boys.  She twisted out of the captain’s grasp and tried to run to them.  One of the pirates stepped in front of her and slapped her hard across the face.  She left out a cry of pain as she spun and tumbled to the ground, her cheek bright red and smarting.  Kirby struggled to escape the captain, who had doubled his grip on Kirby.

            He thrust Kirby away and looked straight at him.  “Do not move unless we tell you to,” the British pirate hissed.  He looked straight at Kirby, daring him to help Lizzle up.  Kirby looked away and turned towards Aubrey, Fish, and Thedude.  The three of them were being escorted by the pirates towards where Kirby, Lizzle, and the pirate stood.  Lizzle got up and stood next to Kirby, her blue eyes glaring furiously at the pirate who had slapped her.

            The British pirate stepped forward to meet Aubrey as he and the other two boys approached.  The man chuckled.  “Well, well, look what we have here.  It seems that we’ve captured the amazing Aubrey Falconer himself.”  He mockingly bowed to Aubrey, smirking the entire time.  “And on what fine occasion do we owe this visit?”

            Aubrey stared coolly at the man.  “Let them go.  You only need me for a bargaining chip.”

            The pirate laughed.  “I am not a fool.  And anyways, who said we’re going to bargain?”

            Kirby caught his breath.  Does that mean he’s going to kill us…? he thought.  Fish and Thedude both looked worried too.

            The man’s smile disappeared suddenly.  “Take them all to the cell and confiscate all the weapons they have.  Bring the weapons and their buggies to Storage Room B,” he snapped at a nearby pirate.

            “Yes, sir!” the pirate yelled.  He and the others grabbed the five and led them away.

            As they walked, the British man’s voice drifted after them, dripping with sarcasm.  “My name is Captain Smithe.  Welcome to our home.  I hope you enjoy your stay…”

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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,337v
Posted 2010/04/11 - 13:31 GMT
Great job! The suspense is killing me...
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/11 - 16:29 GMT
Haha, thanks.
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
2 days - 5,444v
Posted 2010/04/11 - 14:49 GMT
...i could try somthing ridiculous and save you all!!!
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/11 - 16:30 GMT
Hrm...  Doesn't fit in with what I've written so far, but if I do put you in, what would you want your buggy's colors to be, and what design/color would you want on your cutlass?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 week - 24,924v
Posted 2010/04/11 - 22:57 GMT
Great job, Kirby! I'm on the edge of my seat!
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/12 - 3:20 GMT
Thanks!  (I comment on everyone's posts just to bam my post.  No offense acorn.  :D)
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 week - 24,924v
Posted 2010/04/12 - 14:32 GMT
None taken, Kirby! Oh, and also, could my character's name be Xavier? He would have long hair (For a guy. Girl's hair just looks weird on a guy. Maybe just down to his ears?) His hair would also be dark brown. He would have blue eyes, dark blue jeans, a t-shirt when warmer out and a hoodie when cooler. And instead of a cutlass he would have a double-sided sword. (if you don't want to make him like this, you don't have to. This is just the way I imagine him.)
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 0:15 GMT
Sure!  It saves me the trouble of making up a character!  :P  Do you want any design on your sword?  Oh, and what colors do you want your buggy to be?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 week - 24,924v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 21:47 GMT
My sword (not cutlass, mind you.) wouldn't have any design on it, but the buggy would be black with a hint of blue.
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
2 days - 7,898v
Posted 2010/04/12 - 17:39 GMT
Great Story! I can not wait for the next one!  Also could I be inserted in the story?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 0:17 GMT
Thanks!  And sure!  What design (if any) do you want on your cutlass, and what colors do you want your buggy to be?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
2 days - 7,898v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 1:39 GMT
Thanks.  For my Buggy Colors an Orange Paint Job with Red-Orange tint.  My weapon would be a 2 ft long sword with a gold hilt and blade made from the same material the current buggy's wings with color to match my buggy.  I would look 5' 8" with brown hair, jeans and an orange t-shirt.  Of corse if all this is all right with you.
 
( if you haven't guessed i like orange :P )
 
Thanks
 
Mr_Mars
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 4,167v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 1:06 GMT
THAT'S FREAKIN' AWESOME!!
 
The suspensence is killing me! When will the next part be out?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 22:00 GMT
Thanks!  And it'll come out when I type it up and have it edited.  :)
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
3 days - 10,628v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 21:42 GMT
Very nice, one of the best, but you are killing me with the suspense
I'm still slated to be in it, right?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 22:01 GMT
Well, I'm just going to put in characters when I need them.  So if I need a character later on, I'm just going to go back to the posts and see who wanted to be in it.
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 week - 24,177v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 21:44 GMT
Pretty good, Kirby.
 
You know Lizzle doesn't have blonde hair, right...?
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
1 day - 3,527v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 22:02 GMT
Thanks.  And lol, no I didn't.  I just made up an appearance for the people who I didn't know what they actually looked like.
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Re: The Explorer War (Part 2) - Captured!
2 days - 7,304v
Posted 2010/04/13 - 21:48 GMT
Maybe she dyed it in the story with out telling you Tiger.


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