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The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
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A beginning episode to the new comic series, based on The Colorshocks
Submitted By EmperorEctoshock on 11/06/27
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"I look around through the window of the ship, viewing multiple mountain-like ranges and volcanoes, looking up at the clear, but dim, blue sky. The ship slowly begins to land down on the ground of Mars, making contact to what would seem to be a new life. The CSJ 12 spaceship lands down once extending its mechanical legs, balancing itself on the rocky floor. I glace once more outside the window, anxious to know who are what lies beyond the point of our area, curious to know what sorts of life-forms are there besides us humans. I walk towards everyone else sitting down, preparing.... preparing for a new life."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "We're here, guys. Let's go. *Notices that everyone ignores my comment, continuing to sit and mourn in grief* Everyone.... I know that the loss of our beloved leader is hard for us to handle, but this is what he would've wanted. We must live on, and carry out the legacy of herorics to save all whos lives are in jeopardy. Now, please... come, let's go. Don't forget that I'm grieving as much as you all are. *Walks down steps, then opens the spaceship door, looking outside in a wide radius* Here we are, guys. Let's go."
 
(Everyone stands up and walks outside the ship, viewing what Mars looks like now)
 
Gildedshock (Aztec): "Incredible...."
 
Bronzeshock (Brody): "I know right... it's so wide and spacious here."
 
Venomshock (Veronica): "Yeah... and it's dark and....hollow. Kind of like me."
 
Thundershock (Star): "Yes, we know that, V. You don't have to remind us all the time, you know."
 
Venomshock (Veronica): *Looks at Star grimly* "Whatever..."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "Let's move on. I picked up a signature of active life forms in a town not far from here with my scanner. It should be less than a couple of feet away."
 
(Everyone groups up and begins to walk foward towards the town; On the way, we see tire tracks on the floor, probably made some sort of Mars exploration-like vehicle)
 
(10 minutes later)
 
"We have reached our destination. Once we saw what was up ahead, all of us were estatic to find humans living among the aliens in peace and harmony. However, we all saw something else that was unexpected. We saw various amounts of people flying and driving in buggies. It's understandable, being that walking on a rocky terrain like this isn't easy, but this was somewhat unusual. It wasn't just Buggies - it was tanks and hovercrafts, and unbelievebly, jets! Another thing we noticed that we found even stranger... everyone had their own codename engraved on their traveling vehicle. The names, however, was the strange part. The names everyone and I saw were very unusual - they looked like names you'd see as internet email names, names known from the past and/or future, and names that are just...there."
 
(We all walk foward into the town, looking left and right at everyone's vehicle and names, somewhat adjusting to their own personality. We kept walking, until we stopped once everyone stopped and stared at us, wondering who we are, and what is our purpose here)
 
Ectoshock (Me): *Raises hands in the air slowly* "We come here in peace! We wish to speak to any leader of yours here in discussion of your survival. Please, -whispers- 'I cannot believe I'm about to say this, but' take us to your leader!"
 
(Paul, Olivia, Aztec, Star, and everyone else begins to laugh)
 
Ectoshock (Me): "What's so funny?"
 
Plasmashock (Paul): "No, no, nothin', man, it's nothing... *Paul snickers under his breath*"
 
Ectoshock (Me): "Wow, guys, you're so helpful... *shakes head in hilarity and irritation*"
 
(Suddenly, a group of people walk towards me wearing suits that look like they're high-ranked people in the community)
 
Achilles: "Hello. My name is Achilles. *Achilles points towards the rest of his group* We are the Moderators. We are the peacekeepers and law-makers of the Martian society."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "My name's Ectoshock. And it's very good to know that."
 
(All of the Moderators walk foward, eagered to meet the rest of the Colorshock members)
 
Flynn: "Hello, I'm Flynn, but you can just call me Flyclub." *Flynn shakes hands with everyone else*
 
Kruncher: "Hello, there. My name's Kruncher. *Kruncher shakes hands with everyone else*
 
Ectoshock (Me): "I am eagred as well to meet you all, but unfortunately, now is not the time. I must speak with your leader, if there is one."
 
Achilles: "Yes, I agree. In fact, he's been expecting you."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "He....has?"
 
Achilles: "Yes. Right this way, Ectoshock."
 
(Achilles and the rest of the Moderators walk away, walking towards a huge building in the heart of the town, then, Me and the rest of the Colorshocks following, walk inside the building, viewing a large hallway with benches, sofas, and wooden and steel chairs; At the end of the hallway, we reach a door with a dull glass window, and on the window of the door, appears in giant letters: A.F. And, beneath the initials is a short name that says: (admin)+)
 
Lasershock (Loretta): "'A.F?' What does A.F mean?"
 
Flareshock (Olivia): "And what's 'Admin' mean an'way?"
 
Ectoshock (Me): *Looks at door window with high focus* "Well....we're about to find out."
 
(I place my hand on the door knob, and turn it, opening the door. In front of my view, I see a man in his chair, facing the opposite way towards the window of his office, and his legs placed on the edge of the window sill)
 
Man: "Hello...."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "Greetings...."
 
Administrator: *Turns around facing the rest of us* "My name is Aubrey Falconer. I am the Administrator of the Moderators, and the leader of the Martian Community. I've been expecting you, Ectoshock. The same goes for the rest of the Colorshock members. I understand you need to speak to me about an important matter."
 
Ectoshock (Me): "Yes, sir."
 
(Aubrey waves his hand slightly, signaling for the rest of the Moderators to leave the office)
 
Administrator: "Let's talk then. Begin...." 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 day - 3,981v
Posted 2011/06/28 - 2:00 GMT
Wow! it sounds amazing!!! any way i could get my character in it, just curious?
 
EDIT: cant wait for the next chapter!!
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 week - 32,767v
Posted 2011/06/28 - 9:24 GMT
Dude, you got the wrong personality for most of the mods...
 
And if you want to describe what Aubrey looks like you can look at his "assorted pictures" on aubreyfalconer.com under "Fun".
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 week - 32,767v
Posted 2011/06/28 - 13:58 GMT
Dude... You might get slammed by some people for using them... I'm pretty sure you have to get permission to use their name.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
20 hours - 3,545v
Posted 2011/06/28 - 18:28 GMT
I didn't see me anywhere in this story..... grr. :P
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,607v
Posted 2011/06/28 - 20:00 GMT
Well, I kind of wanted it to be creative. I really wanted to use the Mods in this story, being that Mods are high ranked players in the martian community. 
 
@ Ender - How would a Mod actually  act, Ender?
 
@ Yoshi - Well, hopefully, the Mods I mentioned would let this slide and enjoy the story. But, asking permission to use their names in the story is also a good idea.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 8,344v
Posted 2011/06/29 - 2:06 GMT
nice story. :)
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Hom
1 week - 31,378v
Posted 2011/06/29 - 2:09 GMT
Dang it im not in...my hair didnt work well at the recital. Anyways i really like it! 
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
5 days - 26,111v
Posted 2011/07/03 - 17:16 GMT
Nice story Ecto, it's awesome. :) Hey, in the next chapter, try to put some of us in. ;) Awesome story.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,746v
Posted 2011/07/03 - 20:18 GMT
Hey, I want in on the story too...
Anyway, is there gonna be any action?
Also, can you do it from 1st or 3rd person view instead of like a play please? I hate scripts...
see ya,
ffroggy
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,368v
Posted 2011/07/03 - 20:27 GMT
THAT BLEW MY MIND!! lol its awesome
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
6 hours - 802v
Posted 2011/07/04 - 14:45 GMT
Nice story, Ecto.
 
/waits to be put in the next part
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 week - 32,767v
Posted 2011/07/05 - 23:17 GMT
Idea!
 
You could put all the mods as "Mod 1, Mod 2..." Then you don't have to ask permission to use the names, nor do you totally screw up the mods' personalities.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,607v
Posted 2011/07/07 - 19:17 GMT
That's a good idea.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 week - 31,378v
Posted 2011/07/08 - 14:18 GMT
Moonwalker found u mind...also LOVE THIS STORY...maybe you will be the next picard.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,368v
Posted 2011/07/27 - 22:23 GMT
Moonwalker found u mind? LOL what does that mean lol?!?!
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,368v
Posted 2011/07/27 - 22:25 GMT
lol nvm I got it LMBO!!
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 week - 32,767v
Posted 2011/07/27 - 22:56 GMT
Since moonwalker bammed this post uselessly, and my idea was a good one, Why not use it?
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,368v
Posted 2011/07/27 - 23:07 GMT
It wasn't uselessly I like the story. And yes your idea is a good one but wouldn't it make sense to have the mods name so people know what Ecto is talking about?
 
But it does make sense instead of having to ask permission.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
2 hours - 210v
Posted 2011/07/14 - 22:25 GMT
u wouldn't happen to be able to give us the URL for the Colorshock HQ course, would you?
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,607v
Posted 2011/07/14 - 22:31 GMT
No, sorry. Only full-on Colorshock members can use the URL. Sorry =
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,746v
Posted 2011/07/17 - 0:13 GMT
Define Full-on Colorshock member...
ffroggy
PS isn't it A-C-E's Dream world? or was it Arena of Secrets?
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
3 days - 9,607v
Posted 2011/07/17 - 3:51 GMT
Dream World.
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Re: The Colorshock Chronicles: Episode I [Part 2]- A Place to Call Home
1 day - 5,338v
Posted 2011/09/01 - 4:48 GMT
Very nice story! 


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